I’m almost done with the larger revisions related to M.L.’s suggestions, and it’s actually turning out a lot easier than I was making it *laugh*

I was looking at possibly adding or modifying several scenes, and it turns out that a paragraph here and a line there will actually get across what I left out.  If I’d had time before the deadline, I might have even caught some of it myself, but there’s a reason I have M.L. look over all these — I always miss a few things, and she always catches them.

Next step is fleshing out some of the scenes in the last third that I didn’t have as much time to read through and tweak before posting it in the contest.  Then, it will be adding bits of color to the world throughout.

After that, I’ll go into my full first-pass edit I usually do before sending a story out to first readers, let alone posting it.

Already addressed a couple of the more “duh” passages, which included at least one continuity error and one that gave the appearance of same.  Fixed a line of dialogue that was totally out of sync with someone having a doctor’s education.  Then, I started delving into the things that need to be in there to round out Dara’s character and her motivation.

I’ll probably deal with the typos and other grammar oddities as I go, then stomp the last of them in the first-pass edit of this draft.

My goal is to have this draft done before next weekend, then get it off to M.L. for her to review the changes.  Final tweaks should probably only take a day or two, at which point I’ll do the nuts-n-bolts clean-up, and send it off to Roust to sweep up anything I missed.

Then, I’ll finally be ready to post it at SOL and update the version at Lit.