Already addressed a couple of the more “duh” passages, which included at least one continuity error and one that gave the appearance of same.  Fixed a line of dialogue that was totally out of sync with someone having a doctor’s education.  Then, I started delving into the things that need to be in there to round out Dara’s character and her motivation.

I’ll probably deal with the typos and other grammar oddities as I go, then stomp the last of them in the first-pass edit of this draft.

My goal is to have this draft done before next weekend, then get it off to M.L. for her to review the changes.  Final tweaks should probably only take a day or two, at which point I’ll do the nuts-n-bolts clean-up, and send it off to Roust to sweep up anything I missed.

Then, I’ll finally be ready to post it at SOL and update the version at Lit.